I agree with everyone so far about the concept, but the near right angle of the cloud and the spike is a bit harsh and hurts the flow of the eye across the design. Make the bit of cloud attached to the spike a bit more organic or rounded like the way it looks if you hook a part of your shirt with your index finger (go ahead and tug on your shirt, I’ll wait)....see? its a little more rounded and that’ll give it some weight and depth.
Next I’d get rid of the smaller cloud on the right. My point being you’re trapping negative space to the left of the skyscraper while at the same time disrupting the flow of my eye with that little cloud on the right. Its fun to have it fitting onto the shoulder of a shirt like that but I think it hurts the design and would be worth the sacrifice. Your eye will flow evenly from the ripped cloud down the skyscraper and off the shirt to the left.
i agree with cajun about the smaller cloud. However i dont neceassarily think it needs to be deleted. first i would make it a bit smaller still, then place it somewhere close/adjacent to the big cloud, making them more of a unit.
i would also suggest maybe scaling down the size of the design on the tshirt by a minute amount. huge prints are always awesome, but perhaps giving the top of the shirt a bit more breathing room/white space could help the composition.
i dunno, i could be totally wrong ;p
either way, its a really cool concept and nice design, good job ;p
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RustyEight said 4 months ago
I really like this concept, and it makes a decent tee
ChadDoesDesign said 4 months ago
haha it took me a second to figure it but i agree with rustyeight
Jon Kruse said 4 months ago
cool
danrule said 4 months ago
yeah I was wondering if the rip in the cloud is obvious enough?
RustyEight said 4 months ago
I actually like that you don’t pick up on it right away. Makes it a little more interesting.
hideouscarwreck said 4 months ago
this is cool :]
Ameeee said 4 months ago
Secret Agenda said 4 months ago
creative and well executed!
NorthLane said 4 months ago
nice concept
cajun metal said 4 months ago
I agree with everyone so far about the concept, but the near right angle of the cloud and the spike is a bit harsh and hurts the flow of the eye across the design. Make the bit of cloud attached to the spike a bit more organic or rounded like the way it looks if you hook a part of your shirt with your index finger (go ahead and tug on your shirt, I’ll wait)....see? its a little more rounded and that’ll give it some weight and depth.
Next I’d get rid of the smaller cloud on the right. My point being you’re trapping negative space to the left of the skyscraper while at the same time disrupting the flow of my eye with that little cloud on the right. Its fun to have it fitting onto the shoulder of a shirt like that but I think it hurts the design and would be worth the sacrifice. Your eye will flow evenly from the ripped cloud down the skyscraper and off the shirt to the left.
madeforyou said 4 months ago
wow!
danrule said 4 months ago
good point cajun, it does look better with that cloud moved to the left, directly above the building.
cajun metal said 4 months ago
glad to help
illdthedj said 4 months ago
i agree with cajun about the smaller cloud. However i dont neceassarily think it needs to be deleted. first i would make it a bit smaller still, then place it somewhere close/adjacent to the big cloud, making them more of a unit.
i would also suggest maybe scaling down the size of the design on the tshirt by a minute amount. huge prints are always awesome, but perhaps giving the top of the shirt a bit more breathing room/white space could help the composition.
i dunno, i could be totally wrong ;p
either way, its a really cool concept and nice design, good job ;p
if you could, please look at my designs and leave feedback/comments/critique/advice ;p